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Author:  KB [ 08 Nov 2018, 08:50 ]
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Alison H wrote:
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Her splendid eyes grew misty at the thought ... But the Robin was only twelve now. There were eight or nine years to go before they could decide that she was safe. At present, any danger of disease was to be warded off most carefully, for they all dreaded any strain on her little strength.

With the memory of the exquisite little face, framed in its short thick crop of black curls, floating before her mind, Jo felt suddenly sick at the thought of how nearly the Robin had been exposed to infection


I feel "suddenly sick" every time I read that. "Splendid eyes"?! And why isn't Jo worried about poor Peggy, who has caught measles and is quite ill!


Perhaps she has been reassured by the assurance that Peggy's got "a tough little constitution... don't worry about her". It's only later that she learns how ill she's really been.

Author:  Terrygo [ 08 Nov 2018, 09:01 ]
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I know its been mentioned but I hate Len and Regs engagement....it should never have happened anyway but the way it was written was pretty dire!!

Author:  Mrs Redboots [ 24 Nov 2018, 19:40 ]
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Lotte wrote:
LucyP wrote:
Rix and Peggy Bettany talking to the King of Belsornia in Camp. 'Where's ve c'own, ven?' Or somesuch. In fact, any of EBD's reproductions of small children talk make me squirm.

Never, ever read any scenes in Seven Scamps with Tim. He's five, but he talks like a toddler.

Although there is form - Kipling's small children all spoke like that! And, in fact, small children do speak like that, if my own grandsons are anything to go by. Their speech does normalise when they start attending school - they get speech therapy pretty fast if it doesn't - but many kids do start school sounding much younger than they are. My older grandson did - his vocabulary and intellect were at a level that is normal for his age, but he sounded like a child of two or three (he eventually caught up with himself, and it stopped being a problem)!

I do agree, though, it is irritating to read, but then, so is most dialect.

Author:  brie [ 27 Nov 2018, 22:08 ]
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It's not up there with the Jam scene by any stretch of the imagination but I always think Tom trapping the "burglars" in Tom Tackles is such a strangely written bit- why would she not tell anyone about this at the time?? It just doesn't make sense to me.

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