So here's our effort and the solution. There's a link to the solution/explanation in the magazine HERE
and the Examiners' Report is HERE
Apparently the extra t and lack of an i in line 3 was an error on the magazine's part. Also both wedding and birthday cake were acceptable in line 16 as were strange and odd in line 17.
I think we did really well.
1. I could not sleep a wink last night,
2. The world to me seemed upside down.
3. My head upon the pillows white,
4. Is too fast changed to white from brown.
5. And life so far as I could gauge,
6. Seemed like this hieroglyphics page.
7. My beating heart gave violent knocks,
8. As in the dark I clearly traced.
9. A wrong-lived life in prison docks,
10. Must as I thought, full soon be faced.
11. I turned the creasèd pillows around,
12. And shook the leaden feathers bound.
13. And as the beams of morn stole in,
14. They found me lying still awake,
15. And pointed with a glittering grin,
16. To an empty box of [wedding/birthday] cake.
17. How strange (or possibly odd) that our worst woes by far,
18. Are those which self inflicted are.
I could not sleep a wink last night,
The world to me seemed upside down;
My head upon the pillows white,
So restless changed the white to brown;
And life, so far as I could gauge,
Seemed like this hieroglyphic page.
My heart gave violent double knocks,
As in the dark I clearly traced
A wrong-lived life; and prison docks
Must, as I thought, full soon be faced.
I turned the creasèd pillows round
And shook the leaden feathers bound.
And as the beams of morn stole in,
They found me lying still awake
And pointed, with a glittering grin,
To an empty box of wedding-cake!
How odd that our worst woes by far
Are those which self-inflicted are!
Are you ready for another?